First of all, don't take my comments on a defensive way. I want people to improve when doing videos. If you do another video, I'm sure everyone will be pleased if the quality improves. Not only visual quality.
And of course, and more important, those comments are not only for you, are also for all this people that works very much to do a video, and are very happy after finishing them because they have accomplished personal goals, but objectively have not the result the creator thinks it have. After long time seeing those videos and don't saying anything, I expect those comments are for all of them, not only for you. Don't make it something personal.
What I want is everyone to learn and improve, keep that in mind.
First of all, don't talk of it as a movie. Or short. It's just a dogfight sequence.
What kind of movie has the bar? Or the final press Esc to quit? That's worst than amateur.
There's no history. Only a fight sequence and a landing. Boring. Seen tons of videos like this. Or just wanted people know how good you are in a dogfight? Sorry, Top Gun there is only one.
Tell spectators something on the video. See Bill et John movies. Their success is not based on lockon clips, is what they tell to spectators using that sim. It's another world.
You have just flight and tried to do a video with the trk. It's a big mistake.
First you have to know what do you want (an script) and after that, prepare the missions for take the clips that you need, not on the other way. Doing a good video is not something can be done in one or two days. It can take weeks or months, depending of your skills with the editing programs and, of course, your free time.
What is a movie without initial and final credits? They are easy to do.
You use the same song. Maybe you like it. But I don't think is addecuate for dramatic moments (been hit, for example). Use more sounds. Sounds have to synchronize to what is seen, not in the other way. That's called audio editing.
The sounds are always the last thing that is added to a movie.
Also the editing.
Let's talk about one person that is more important than the director: the editor.
The editor works with the material the director has given. The editor has to know how many seconds has to have an scene to transmit the feelings he wanted to. Usually a director is very happy with a 20 seconds clip, due to it was very difficult to get them.
The editor uses only 5.
20 seconds make spectators bored, 5 are enough.
Think as you were three different persons.
When you have the idea of the movie, think about what do you want to tell, what happens. Don't think in camera angles. Write all those ideas on a paper or electronic format and organize them.
When you direct, take the best material you can, following the script. The script has to tell you what happens, but not how do you represent it on the movie. You are who read the script and think about what is telling you and how do you transform it on clips.
Third, the editor. The director (yourself in this case) has given to you tons of clips and with them you have to do a nice movie.
As said before, don't matters how difficult was to take the 20 seconds clip of the example. Matters what will think spectators. (We).
I expect this will help you all, not only you.
Sorry if you understand in an offensive way, it's not my intention.