Not trying to be rude, but rather trying to give constructive critisism for you to improve. i see some room for improvements.
1. Spell checking, plenty of spelling errors
2. Turn off markers for a cimematic feel.
3. Make sure the FPS/Resolution is at an acceptable level.
Spelling error: Ordred - Ordered, Handel - Handle, Dont - Don't
Was this recorded using the Oculus Rift? Becouse there seems to be some graphical artifacting or low resolution stuff going on, not ideal for a movie.
With some polish it would be an nice video.