My own feedback:
The transportstrecke in the beginning is a little unnecessary. Why not start directly from the carrier as in "Train Heist"? Or move the ship closer to the carrier.
I would also suggest a little more instruction before flying under the first small bridge, so you can prepare the maneuvers, i.e. turn to the left. I was unsure what to do right after, and there is very precious little time there.
It would also be cool to have a cut-off time where you are approved and allowed to "join the crew", if there isn't already one.
Fun mission though!
Attempt 1-3: crashed and burned.
-And the fourth?
-I don't know, I'll tell you tomorrow, but it's looking good so far... ;)
Just kidding, attempt four: 1:06!